Audience essay feedback and learner response

1Unfortunately, a fair number of the 1,111 words are not yours – they are from the following website:

·     Music industry: https://www.recordingconnection.com/reference-library/recording-entrepreneurs/how-the-internet-changed-music/

·     On the positive side, this is excellent research. However, you cannot copy and paste huge chunks of text – this is called plagiarism and if you wish to study at A Level or at university then you need to learn this vital lesson. At university, you will be thrown out for plagiarising an essay.

·    The other key area to work on (probably because a lot of it is plagiarised) is the organization of your writing. You need to work on your paragraph structure and in particular topic sentences – the first sentence in a paragraph. Make sure it focuses on the question and develops your argument.

·    Spelling, punctuation, and grammar. You are not using capital letters correctly – that’s not good enough at GCSE level.x

LR:

·         Complete the LR tasks on the GCSE Media Year 1 blog – Audience and Industry essay feedback LR 

2) What was the word count for your essay?
my word count was 1111 words


3) What was your strongest paragraph? Why do you think it was better than others?

my strongest paragraph is the introduction because if the intro was bad the reader will get bored so that is why I think my into was strong  
  

4) What was your weakest paragraph?
my weakest paragraph is the music industry because and coped and pasted most of the things from there 
my weakest pap
5) How can you improve your extended writing in GCSE Media Studies in the future?

In the future, I will not just copy and paste I will just take it and change into my own assay

6) Write ONE thing you have learned about the internet, audience, and industry from completing this essay. 

That over the last decade the worlds technology has changed dramatically